a few impressions from a non-seller (and business communication instructor):
I'd take out "My cakes are more like art than cake" on the Pricing and FAQ sections. I know what you're trying to say, but it kind of reads like: "My cakes will look awesome, but they might taste like sawdust.
But whatever, they look AWESOME!" If I'm paying $9-19 a slice, I want cake that is cake (sweet yummy goodness).
Actually, I'd cut that entire paragraph, as I think someone else suggested. It's jarringly negative, and the next paragraph: "Each cake I create is one-of-a-kind..." basically does what you want it to (explaining that your cakes are pricier than Costco's) in a much more positive fashion, which meshes better with the overall tone. Same for the FAQ, where you basically repeat the same section.
I also co-sign on the concerns that the homepage has way too much on it and the cakes should be front and center with your stories coming later. I skimmed it. The stories are fun, but they take a while to wade through, and if I'm looking at bakeries online, I'm probably trying to do a fast comparison shop, so I want basic cake info first.
Under "Some important information": What do you mean that you only do cakes for people you enjoy being with? How can you determine whether or not you'll like working with me? Do we have to hang out first? Cake dating?
What's the range for "local" delivery?
Under "do you make cupcakes...": perhaps I might rearrange, again to focus on what you CAN do: "My focus is on creating unique, amazing cakes that make my clients and my guests gasp and say 'wowwee!' every time they order for me. Therefore, I do not offer cupcakes, petit fours, or cookies."
Tastings: I think you don't have to explain why you prefer not to do them on weekends. This is your business, you dictate your availability. It seems sufficient to say "most appts are...Tues-Thurs." Having the explanation there makes it seem like maybe you could
be available if I call about the right Friday. That way, if you do happen to want to allow a Friday tasting to someone, it seems like you're being extra accomodating rather than they twisted your arm...but maybe I'm overthinking it.
Overall--I like it! It's cute and fun, and your excitement about cakes comes through. I really like the blog, and how you show the process without giving it all away.
kdbobo, who wonders why she can't edit her own writing as closely as she can other people's