I agree with Kiddiekakes in that I like the "About Rachel" section.
There were a few things I might change.
Your Home Page-Start a tradition in your family or at your workplace by ordering beautifully decorated cakes for
everyone you know
. -change the word "anyone" to "everyone".
Your Cookie/Cupcakes Page-Add to your celebration with custom cookies to treat your guests. Whether you're celebrating a birthday, baby or wedding shower, anniversary, graduation, retirement, or anything in between
[comma] Creations in Cake can create wonderful cookies just for you
. -add the comma after "or anything in between" and capitalize your business name.
I didn't realize that you were the one that did the cool pirate and pirate ship cake.
Very exciting stuff you have going on. Best of luck to you.